Things I like:
• Injected a sense of humor~ fun to read
Example: Then he said with the kindest voice as he walked straight to the girl, “Oh honey, what I’ve done? What’s wrong with you? You don’t like the heels I gave you, do you? Babe, they are Italian, genuine leather.”
• Has good imagination
Things that can be improved:
• Grammar mistakes~ quite a lot
• Vocabulary~ limited
• Not enough description due to lots of dialogues
http://kydekhaidhir.blogspot.com/2011/11/girl-and-man.html
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